Excerpt from Slumber Citizens (In the Waking Day)

He’s 6’2” but not in the non-thought of slumber. He does not remember this next dream:

Something grips his shoulders and pins him to the wall. This something is invisible. It is an invisible demon – the most terrifying kind. He feels the weight of a body push up against him, but when he pushes back, there’s nothing there; the nothing there swings his arms up in the air so that his chest feels naked and exposed, and then squeezes his crotch so that he yelps. His father who is standing there in the same room doesn’t hear him. He feels his lips frozen in the shape of a smile and his gums sting, and the invisible demon moves his arms up and down like the top half of jumping jacks. His father lets out a loud belch and laugh as he feels a slap to his right cheek, then his left.

In the morning when he wakes up, he breathes in deeply and stretches his arms out. He heads for Sunday morning church, dressed in a pen-striped white shirt and black tie, black slacks and his newest pair of Velcro shoes.

After crossing himself in front of the statue of Christ, he excuses himself to the mens room. He chooses to urinate in the stall, and then takes out a permanent marker from his pocket. He draws a demon with horns on the door and then ex’s it out. He hums a little tune audibly. Someone’s happy, he hears a voice coming from the urinal say. Yes, he answers, as he draws another demon and crosses it out. I never hum in public, he adds, as he listens to the other tinkle. But today I feel so alive.

It starts off small.

4 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Brynn
    Jan 15, 2011 @ 10:46:04

    Just another amazing except from your mind. You are such a phenomenal writer…I like tease with the sac-religiousness of the images of urinating while humming & demon inspired graffiti. It speaks to me.


    • cannyuncanny
      Jan 15, 2011 @ 11:09:48

      Thanks for the comment Brynn! The best compliment is to hear that my writing speaks to my readers…this is an excerpt from my slowly developing novella/novel, and what started out as a science fiction idea is turning into more of a psychological fantasy/phenomena, more along the lines of what I tend to write. Thanks for reading!


  2. Brynn
    Jan 15, 2011 @ 10:47:26

    (Apologies for misspellings in comments- I was a member of the spell-check generation, we don’t even bother to think before we type! And, yes, I am the authority on my entire generation and they’ve elected me to speak to their skill deficits. Ha!)


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